Rough Cut of Hate This Part

Above is the rough edit of my music video, Hate This Part. I presented this edit to my peers to see what they thought about it and what could be improved when creating my final video. Below is the feedback which was given by:       (KEY:- GREEN= POSITIVE FEEDBACK       ORANGE=IMPROVEMENTS TO BE MADE )

      Teacher and Fellow Media Students 

• Great use of the grey tints within aspects of the narrative within the video.
• Good use of washed out colours.
• Good use of cross-cutting.
• Locations were good in that it was all believeable and familiar. Casting was really good too, you and your boyfriend look good and look like a believable match.
• Good narrative within the video.
• The arrangement, timeline and narrative come together well. It is certainly well organised and put together such that is makes sense. The dancing was also very good.
• The video is really good and well made. It is well plotted and the shots were all fantastic.
• Lovely shots of London in the beginning, possibly add more to the sequence and slow down the editing.
• Within the dance sequences add more shots by cutting quicker and re-framing the sequence on final cut.
• Some aspects of the video are not synchronized effectively, clear this up.
• When the male figure is sitting outside the door add three jump cuts which eventually focus on his face.
• Add the relevant effects to the sequence.
• On Final Cut, use the pen tool to create a delayed shadow effect.
• Maybe change the colours on the dance sequence.
• Try and get rid of the sunlight within the video as it looks quite odd with the rest of the narrative.
• Try and film more shoots of close-ups of the eyes.
• Enhance the colour of the blackout shown.
• There are some crew shadows which were visable at times in the dance sequences, possibly re-frame the shot to get rid of the shadows.
•  The scene where the female is walking in the park is quite shakey. Perhaps this could be taken out  of the sequence. 

Hate This Part Right Here Prezi and Lyric Annotation:

"Hate This Part Right Here" Pitch on Prezi

Feedback:

• Think closely about what costumes the singer and dancers are going to be wearing throughout the video.
• How are the dance scenes going to be filmed? Think about maybe using a contrast between close ups/mid shots/long shots.
• Another thing my class suggested to me is that both myself and Khushel thought about tracking the singer walking down the street and we were told to think about two things: one being that tracking someone walking down the street may be difficult considering the fact that streets are uneven and could make the footage bumpy so maybe try to work around this by attaching a camera to a stick or broom to see whether this would make any difference. The second being that filming on the street will  include passers walking by and will be exceedingly busy so maybe think about a location a bit more secluded.

Lyrics:

We're driving slow through the snow on 5th Avenue  Possible driving scene at night 
And right now radio's all that we can hear
Now we ain't talk since we left, it's so over due Leaves car and starts walking down road
It's cold outside but between us it's worse in here

The world slows down          
But my heart beats fast right now  Walking down street tracking shot 
I know this is the part
Where the end starts
-Protagonist looking through old pics of herself and partner
 Beat of the song speeds up change in colour between black and white and colour

I can't take it any longer
Thought that we were stronger
All we do is linger
Slipping through our fingers        Chorus= Dance scenes
I don't wanna try now
All that's left's goodbye to
Find a way that I can tell you

I hate this part right here
I hate this part right here
I just can't take your tears
I hate this part right here

Everyday, 7 takes of the same old scene           Scene of couple in the house tidying up in evening        not talking.Partner goes and sits down ignoring her.
Seems we're bound by the laws of the same routine
Gotta talk to you now 'fore we go to sleep
But will we sleep once I tell you what's hurting me
Wireframe showing a routine at different times of the day

The world slows down
But my heart beats fast right now  
Shot of a clock slowing down time starting to stop moving.
I know this is the part
Where the end starts

I can't take it any longer
Thought that we were stronger
All we do is linger
Slipping through our fingers
I don't wanna try now                              Dance Scene
All that's left's goodbye to
Find a way that I can tell you
I hate this part right here
I hate this part right here
I just can't take your tears
I hate this part right here

I know you'll ask me to hold on
Partner trying to speak with female. Holding on to her as she pushes him away, camera circulates around the couple.
And carry on like nothing's wrong
But there is no more time for lies
'Cause I see sunset in your eyes
Couple moving away, scene slows down. showing separation, end of relationship

I can't take it any longer
Thought that we were stronger
All we do is linger
Slipping through our fingers Dance scene, Bigger dances as final dance sceneof song.
I don't wanna try now
All that's left's goodbye to
Find a way that I can tell you Female walking away looking upset

That I gotta do it,
I gotta do it,
I gotta do it
I hate this part   Walking down street
I gotta do it,
I gotta do it,
I gotta do it

I hate this part right here
I hate this part right here
I just can't take these tears  Bonfire Burning images of couple. Last shot, showing singer walking away starting her new life
I hate this part right here